~ Start a sentence with Because
~ Start a sentence with "when," "while," "where," etc.
~ Include a powerful adverb
~ Do not repeat the topic noun too much; use pronouns when appropriate
~ Use two adjectives in the predicate
The topic? A new vacation destination that we created in our imaginations! We had fun brainstorming real places on the board spelled forwards and backwards. Then we tried to envision these strange lands in our minds. We wrote paragraphs that began to resemble a tourist brochure, with pictures to match! Some places turned out to be delightful vacation spots, and some places should definitely be avoided. Enjoy some of my favorites:
Lizarb, by Sulwen (5th grade)
Lizarb is a nice, sunny desert on one side, and a dark horrible rainforest on the other. An evil prilled lizard rules the rainforest, with evil snake minions, while a nice desert tortoise rules the desert. In the desert, happy lizards and tortoises live freely. The King Tortoise is fair, and treats his loyal subjects generously. The prilled lizard doesn't like his first name, so he goes by King Prill. His kingdom is filled with snakes and poisonous frogs who hypnotize the rest of the citizens who live in the rainforest. The sky in the rainforest is always covered in gray clouds which bring rain and thunderstorms all year long, while the desert skies are sunny and bright. Lizarb is a great place if you go to the desert, but dark and gloomy in the rainforest. So, if you ever go to Lizarb, stay away from the rainforest side!
Ocsinarf Nas, by Ellery (5th grade)
Ocsinarf Nas is a frosty, snowy, chilly island, surrounded by cold, freezing ice you can walk on. Its only inhabitants are snowy dogs. Because the dogs are friendly and obedient, they love seeing people and tourists. These dogs enjoy pulling visitors around on their comfortable sleds on the chilly snow, because there are no vehicles there. The snow dogs also love to play fetch and other doggy games on the ice surrounding the island. Ocsinarf Nas is a fabulous island with friendly, loving, playful snow dogs.
Selegna Sol, by Abigail (5th grade)
Selgegna Sol is a place that people call a tropical jungle. When visitors are sight-seeing, they see many kinds of frogs, snakes, and other jungle creatures. During the day, it is the best time to see the rarest animal of all, the Selegnian Monkey. Because of all the humid and hot weather, the snakes will always come out, whether there are enemies preying on them or not. Selegna Sol is the best spot for you and your family (except for the snakes!)
(I'm going to give this one to you forward because you'll never get it! "Massachusettes Institute of Technology!")
By Brandon (5th grade)
Ygolonhcet Fo Etutisni Settesuhcassam (Y.E.S) is a dark and evil half submerged city. It is filled with sinful, smelly sorcerers living in shacks, firing spells into the air. Because of this, Y.E.S's mountains are covered in craters and land mines, and half of the island is sunken because of a sorcerer's stray spell. There are many pools of sulphur with ash beaches. There are no airplanes going away from the island, and it is located 500 miles away from any civilization. At 4:00, every sorcerer shoots an evil spell to destruct their city. Yes, Y.E.S's people are sinister and eat raw crab, sharks, and metal. They wear robes of brilliant poison green. Clearly, Y.E.S. is a dark, evil, and poisonous place.
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